Casey has Faded

great poem, well done. my only suggestion is to take out some of the commas. A phrase can gain importance or loose it, depending on how it is read/spoken. Sometimes ...

I'm in a bit of a I only looked at the dialogue... my only comment: you don't need to put asked, said, etc aftereach thing. Over lay it with and ...

beautiful. I think it's wonderful. Perfect. But, for the sake of giving a good, worth while comment, I'll tell you what my creative writing teacher told me. Simplicity is genius. ...

good...just remember that whenever you have puncuation, there is a pause (though the length of that pause depends on what the author wants). You have a lot of talent with ...

If the periods have a longer pause than the commas and are spaced throguhout the poem properly...(I've been reading poetry for years, and sometimes I still forget that pauses only ...

play the song over and over, listening to this woman, this perfect stranger, singing words to a song that showed me my life like it was a tear-streaked mirror ; ...

one major comment before I read it.... you really need commas and periods/puncuationin here. Unless this is for slam poetry and you plan on not taking a breath.... poetry is ...

It reminded me of a not-so-nice comment about poetry I read in Stephen King's "On Writing"..... Don't get me wrong, the poem really does sound interesting. The poem just isn't ...

I totally disagree with faith as well. poetry is poetry, and the fact that the poem is about a father killing his own child and it is written in such ...

a good poem, but watch your words. Too many big, chunky words can slow some readers up and make them give up on your poem. my creative writing teacher told ...

While the way you write is all in style, and I do like your style, you might want to consider changing your sentence structure. when short sentences repeat too often, ...